Creation of a new OC

Hey folks,

I tried to create my own OC for my own storyline based on GSG.

I actually have her picture and her look done.

(Its based on the Henrietta-picture in my avatar, but changed in several details)

Her Roots (before cyborg):
maybe French or Belgian. (last would fits perfectly to her P90)

Her Handler:
thought of a guy named Giorgio or Francesco (which fits her French/Belgian roots)

Her Weapons:
of course Fabrique National P90 (silenced) and a black diving knife -and maybe a pistol or little revolver-

Combat skills:
covert operations and ambushes/plots. (more stealth combating, with silenced P90 or her knife)

Haircolor:
black or brown (still not sure)

Eyecolor:
green or blue (still not sure)

Skincolor:
pale

But i am still not sure with the name.
I thought about a name like Juliette "Juli" or Emilia "Emi".
But maybe a more belgian name... try to help me i dont know any typical belgian names.


I hope that you can help me with the rest of the Details.
And please, give me comments about this new Character, if you want to.

She looks a lot like PreGsG2000 Petruska. Without the Ms Meenie attitude.


Lets see how far you can take her, once you decide on a name.

She looks like Claes crossed with Angelica, which is a fantastic look.

Another girl who uses FN. I'd make her Belgian, since we already have some French and half-French OC's and we can tease her and call her "Poirot".

Funny, yesterday i was just working on this drawing without any goal.
I just changed details that come in my mind.
And thats the result.


Ironically, the baret was the last thing i added.
I dont know why but i always want to add a baret.
Looks more feminine and girlier.

But i think her combat skills makes her like a real assassin, a kind of ninja.

By the way: Whats the meaning of "poirot"?
Maybe a nice, treating name by the other cyborgs.

I'm not saying to change it. I find it funny that very few know about the original Petrushka in the Pre2000 GsG series.

Keep the baret. It makes her who she is.

Yeah, i decided to keep the baret and made her belgian.

Colors? Hmm, black hair with blue eyes and a pale skintone.

I thought, her birthplace should be bruge (brügge) in the flamenland of Belgium.

I try to color the image during the days of christmas, when i'm back at home... If its not to late...

schaschanist wrote:By the way: Whats the meaning of "poirot"?

Hercule Poirot was a Belgian detective created by mystery writer Agatha Christie.

Hehe,
Poirot would sounds great as a treating nickname name by the other cyborgs for her.

I think, Emilia is good and "Emi" as her nickname.

Nice, there are so few stealthy characters.

Hey Folks,

Actually I have the first color-concept done.

I only colored it fast for the concept with colors without textures or shadings.

When i have the time, maybe, i try to do the shadings or the textures.

And i have decided some facts about her.
Her name is Emilie or short "Emi".
She was originally born in Bruges (Brügge) in Flemish-Belgium and speaks a few different languages. Of course Dutch and French (main-languages in Belgium) then Italian and English.
Hair is black and her eyes are blue.
Her family was killed by a culprit and she was heavily injured and crippled by him.

She is a mature girl, not very talkative (relatively quiet).
Most time she is very handsome and follows all instructions from her Handler, but if he is in danger (or threatened by a villain) she turns into a protectress or berserk (depending on the situation).
In combating she is very cold in killing people (often it becomes bloody).
Her Weapons are a FN P90 with attached silencer and her black diving knife, but she also has a dagger knife in her right boot (what is typical for assassins).

She looks good.
But when cyborgs kill, when is it not bloody? One does not order their killer-cyborg-tot to kill the enemy softly.

That is seriously one cute OC.

I was thinking about Emi's personality.
She should be a very calm and friendly girl, when she is with her handler.
Always listening to what her handler is saying. They have a good relationship, talking and doing alot together...
And of course, Emi is always smiling.

When she is with the other cyborg girls, Emilie is quietly but always listening to their stories.
She is a very smart girl and is knowing alot, so they asking often for her advices and opinions.
Her manners are very good and Emi is kind and friendly to every Handler or person at the agency.

She is a loner, so she isn't doing very much with the other cyborg outside of the dormitory.
But when another cyborg is asking for her, then she is always there to help or answer

But i still don't know whether she is living alone in a room or has a room mate. Hard to decide..

Hehe, but i found the diving knife that is in my mind for her:

I have chosen this, cause i own the same one in black.

Kiskaloo wrote:I'd make her Belgian, since we already have some French and half-French OC's and we can tease her and call her "Poirot".

And yet Kara and Monty have not been subjected to "Clouseau"?

ElfenMagix wrote:But when cyborgs kill, when is it not bloody? One does not order their killer-cyborg-tot to kill the enemy softly.

Monty: I do prefer clean over messy when I can get it, Elfen.


Cool looking OC so far sacha. Nice work on the drawing as well.

Last night i was thinking about her Handler and the relationship to him.

He is a former Member of the Belgian State Security Service (BSSS, sounds like a bee) and went to Italy.
He was a not so well friend of Emi's family but knows her since she was a little child.
Here family was murdered by a culprit. She was the only survivor of that massacre but had been heavily injured and crippled (cause hacked off limbs),but as he realized it, he decided to keep her alive by choosing her, although the life in the SWA isn't really safer.

So they have a special relationship.

But, i really dot have a name for him. I thought about a Belgian (French or Netherlands) name.
Maybe Francesco or Frans. But i hope to get a few more names to choose of.

A bit to much like Henrietta in origin. I think Yu has overdone the 'Hacked off limbs' genre, with Henrietta, Triela, Rico, and Angie.

Lets see where you take though, thats the important part.

Alfisti wrote: And yet Kara and Monty have not been subjected to "Clouseau"?

As i heard, your OCs are French and Half-French, so Clouseau would fit.
My OCs are Belgian, so Poirot would fit for them.

Alfisti wrote: Monty: I do prefer clean over messy when I can get it, Elfen.

Emi is setting a sign to the Padanians with her very bloody kills.
Like: "Don't mess with me or it will go ugly!!!"


By the way, i changed the reason why she was chosen to be a cyborg.
Her entire family, just only her Mum and Dad, were killed by a tragic accident in which their house exploded. The reason was the detonation of a gas-pipe.
Her parents were killed and she was lying under the ruins. Her legs (down from the knees) and 2 fingers (little- and ring-finger) of her left hand were amputated in the hospital.
He decided to end this unworthy life and chooses her as his cyborg.

Emi is very talented in killing and torture Padanians/terrorists with her knife but also uses martial arts for fighting.
Her Handler taught her Savate (french-kickboxing), and SCARS (an American combat fighting system).
So Emi is an expert in self-defensing and stealth-killing.

Alfisti wrote:

Kiskaloo wrote:I'd make her Belgian, since we already have some French and half-French OC's and we can tease her and call her "Poirot".

And yet Kara and Monty have not been subjected to "Clouseau"?

I do not want to know what Monty would do to someone who called her "Clouseau", though I do admit it would be a fitting nickname for "Forum Kara".

Emi would take it funny, when someone (of the Cyborgs or Handlers) is calling her "Poirot".

On Padanians she can be very very rude, but at the dorm she is cool and also can make a laugh about it.
She knows that the girls don't mean it serious or bad.

schaschanist wrote:Emi would take it funny, when someone (of the Cyborgs or Handlers) is calling her "Poirot".

If her memory has been wiped after conversion does she know she is Belgian?

Certain skills can not be erased because they are not part of the hypothalamus memory structure; language is one of them. Math and Music is another; all 3 residing on opposite cerebral hemispheres of the brain.

If she lost a memory, her Handler remembers her.
Cause he is Belgian, too.

When Someone should not hear what they are talking about, they speak Netherlands or French.
Advantage of Foreigners.

schaschanist wrote:If she lost a memory, her Handler remembers her.
Cause he is Belgian, too.

Uhm... How can I explain it...
Any memory lost during conditioning would be those personal memories of her past, which most but not all cyborgs goes through a process of having them erased.

schaschanist wrote:When Someone should not hear what they are talking about, they speak Netherlands or French.
Advantage of Foreigners.

Dont let Tommygunner hear you say that! He's from the Netherlands, and according to him, they speak Dutch, though some speak German as well as Dutch. They also learn English and French in school.

As is, Hillshire speaks German. He may know Dutch but is is uncertain that he does but Dutch is related to German like Spanish is related to Italian. He does speak English and French as well. The Croce Brothers know French and from Hillshire's early interrogation, looks like Jean knows German too.

OCs? My OCs only know Spanish, English, Italian, French, Japanese, Chinese, and some German, Russian and Korean. As a gag, Fernando knows Klingon and Vulcan, and is teaching it to Rachel. The two main adults (Fernando and Juanita) know some 56 different computer languages and 160+ different OSes but that is besides the point. Since Dutch has some relationship with German, those who know German should be able to guess what they are saying.

Sorry, yesterday it was a bit late so i lost the word "Dutch". I was lost in translation. ^_^

But I meant Dutch.

By the way, i don't understand dutch much cause its to different to German.
I only understand that bit that, that is a bit similar to German. And that isn't as much as you thought.


I wanted to say, if she is forgettable (not because of the conditioning) he helps her to remember.
But i think she does not needs high doses of the conditioning cause her skills are focused on close combat / hand-to-hand-fighting so heavy injuries and wounds are almost out of the question.

As is, Hillshire speaks German. He may know Dutch but is is uncertain that he does but Dutch is related to German like Spanish is related to Italian.

I imagine that, given the fact he was stationed in Amsterdam while working for Europol that Hilshire is at least conversationally fluent in Dutch. At least, that's the basis I'm working off of in my fanfics.

Hey Folks,

I was thinking about the Name of Emi's Handler.

Maybe i got the best Name.
His name could be Etienne or shorter "Eti".

Then you can call this fratello "Eti & Emi".
Sounds funny, but it's easy to remember.

I like it.

As I noted in chat, I also think Lucien is a nice Belgian name.

Maybe Lucien can be his (almost unknown) second name.
He is having this name, but only a very few people are knowing this.

Etienne had a family. His father was at the BSSS, too.
His mother is a book seller in a bookstore in Ghent.
He have a younger Sister as well,
Etienne's entire family is still living there in Ghent.

Hey Foöks,

I try to write the story about Etienne and Emilie.
But till now i have just the beginning.

Wish me luck.

Luck you have, lets see what you can make!

schaschanist wrote: now i have just the beginning.

Wish me luck.

You have to start somewhere...Viel Glück!

Danke sehr .

I let start the story at the point where Beatrice was killed (Ch. 64).
So my story is a continuation from that point.
It begins with a conversation between Jose, Jean and Chief Lorenzo about the replacement for Beatrice.
And here Etienne is coming into Play.

When I have a bit, i post it to get your opinions and critiques/reviews.
But maybe it can take a while.

Hmm, i was thinking about Emi's work.
I am tempted to let her work autonomously in operating.
She is a professional in torturing people to get informations from them. So i think the best is autonomously working with Etienne.

They get the information the others are needing.

Even an independent cyborg has her handler nearby. With orders of "Go forth, find the target and kill him", might make the cyborg look independent, but its not if its handler is nearby that she has to report too.

The younger ones seem to be closer in operation to their handlers, the older ones seem to have more distance between them. No cyborg has yet been sent out on their own for a mission by the agency. Not even mine, as in I have Francesca in another city compared to her handler, but she does have to report to him often and discuss mission parameters. She also has a small support team looking after her. Without this communication, she would be operating independently. But she is not.

That is what i meant.

There is a distance between her and her handler. But they discussing and briefing their missions, of course.

It's depended independece.
Okey, that sounds a bit weird, but thats it.

Thats how all cyborgs operate.
Its like bringing in a leashed attack dog, show it the target and unleash it.
The rest is on the dog.

Thanks, Elfen.

I cant say it better.
Eti shows her the target and Emi does the rest for her own.

Simply but as i thought effectfull.

That's similar to the dynamic of how my OC's Costante and Nina operate. Only with them, its more a case of Costante bringing her a target that's been apprehended by the other girls and him telling her to have fun and try not to kill them.

Hey Folks,


I have revised again my picture of Emilie "Emi".


I've changed a few details.
The shirt is now a two-in-one-shirt in bicolor, and she even got socks for her boots, too.
I've made her a little bit taller to adjust the proportions.

I like your changes...they help distinguish between your your girl and the Henrietta drawing you based her on.

Considering she's your favorite canon girl can we assume Henrietta & Emilie are close friends in your story?

How do you would estimate Emi's age?
I thought that she is (of course) younger than Petra but not older than Claes or Triela.
I really dont know whats her age.

But i was thinking about one more Weapon for Emk.
In my mind were the polish Wist 94 and the belgian FN Five-Seven.
But i think the Five-Seven is more practically cause its using the same bullets as the P90.
So i choose Five-Seven with silencer and attached flashlight. The silencer for quiet working and the flashlight just for the look.

schaschanist wrote:How do you would estimate Emi's age?
I thought that she is (of course) younger than Petra but not older than Claes or Triela.

I'd suggest 11 or 12.

Ah, okay. Then she was 12 when she joined the agency.

Where can i post my text i have written from time to time during the last days?
Can i post the complete text in a new thread in the Fan Section under "Fanworks" in "the Library"?
Or what should i do instead of posting the text here directly?

schaschanist wrote:Ah, okay. Then she was 12 when she joined the agency.

That's good. On this site there are a lot of teenaged OC's and a few young ones but 12 bridges the gap nicely.

Can i post the complete text in a new thread in the Fan Section under "Fanworks" in "the Library"?

If you want to keep your stories on-site, that would be the place to post them. It works well for shorter chapters.

Or what should i do instead of posting the text here directly?

Or, if you plan to write long chapters/episodes it might be better to get a fanfiction.net account...then provide us a link to your story once you post.

Fanfiction.net can be difficult to deal with; do not hesitate to ask the rest of us on the forum for advice.

Thanks Voodoo.

At the age of 12 she is a good bridge between the younger 1st generation and the older 2nd generation cyborgs.
I like the idea that she can be cool with all the girls.
It's a little bit like a kind of Claes but just with a handler or something that way.

I try to post the text i already have but it's not very long (just only chapter one) cause i haven't had much time to write alot the last days.
But thanks for the information.

12yrs old is a tricky age as this is where most girls get their periods and all of the sudden, the breast fairy starts throwing jars of Estrogen at them. They can be boy crazy at this age, and competition with other girls (developing what first or how fast) can be stiff. You think boys had it bad, girls can be worse. Its like their sexual awareness goes from 0 to 75% over night and for the next few years try to figure out the rest while they try to figure out how to become swans from ugly ducklings that they are.

As such, 12 may be flexible as to what age group she can fit into, it is they who have to accept her and not her of them. This can be trying for a girl at times. She has a lot of development at this age requires a lot of attention for her needs, both mental and physical. Most (male) Handlers out there will not get pads for his girl, usually sending Ferro, Priscilla, Olga or another cyborg for the task.

Lets see how you do this. I would want to read it.

I don't know if most of the cyborgs can have a period.
I thought of it later. Maybe i let her get her period at a later point in the story.

But i know what try to say. Girl in this age from 12 to 15 can be really hard to handle. They are like princesses. Most of them are anarchistic and do whatever they want to. They don't care about what parents are saying or do exactly the opposite.
I know it very well.

But i think our cyborgs a bit different cause of the conditioning.
They are fixed to their handlers.

schaschanist wrote:I don't know if most of the cyborgs can have a period.

It's what Triela's having a whinge about in the fourth episode of the anime.

I guess. Her tummy was hurting.
Henrietta can not have that, cause she has no uterus.
But whats about the others?
They are cyborgs but they are aging too.


Maybe I take care of that question later in my story.

By George, I think he has it!